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PostSubject: Sky City, My Story!   Thu Mar 06, 2008 9:12 am

This entire thread will be posts of each chapter of my stupid story, Sky City.
Which is estimated to be 300 pages long. XP. Under this topic of "Writing" PPl
can also post their own novels which can have an UNLIMITED amount of pages!
So the story now will start.

"Sky City 3"
Chapter one: Christmas Day"

2005 was at its end. It was currently ChristmasTime, the citizens of Sky City had come back from the space expedition. As usual, citizens were raving with madness, shopping for holiday gifts. The people were quite exaggerating over nothing, since shopping wasnt all that important for some people.13 year old Lady Lara was the only one who hated shopping. she was quite lonely, seeming that she only had Jodie and Caitlin to talk to over the internet. But there was always 14 year old chinese girl Trixie, there for her, she just never acknowledged it. Her only two MSN pals barely seemed to keep her happy.

As for the Sky City citizens, they had not stopped thinking about the space expedition. Lara wondered why it was so necessary for the people in Sky City to
have gone to the stupid space expedition in the first place. She had been the only person who hated the Martians with a passion. The Martians had made friends with
the Sky City citizens and with Earth as well. The gullible people actually trusted them. Lara was the only person smart enough to hate the Martians. She was right to feel this way. The Martians were really feeling a way to annihilate the people of Earth, they had just tried to disguise it as a plead for "friendship" This made the gullible Earth citizens life feel, normal, perhaps too normal. How stupid can they be? Back to the story.

It was no wonder that Christmas was the favorite season of the year.
People by this time in December were going buck wild, ripping open presents to open and see what they like. Most of the people hated their gifts. Especially the 36 year old bear woman Verme, who had her birthday on Christmas. But this time, she didn't receive any presents. Her neighbors had given up on buying her presents, trying to please her. By this year, Verme was throwing herself a Christmas/Birthday Bash.
As Verme stood at the front door, waiting for people to come to her party, she looked at her watch, impatiently. Tapping her foot, she heard her 8 year old adopted skunk daughter approach.

"Mommy where are the visitors? I have to pee, BADLY!"
She wailed. Verme stopped tapping her foot and turned to her.
"Charlotte why is it everytime that we wait for something, you have to go piss???"
"Mommy! because I have a weak bladder!" Charlotte replied.
"Since when?"
"Since I was born!"
Verme stood there, thinking.
"Oh yeah, thats right! You have a bladder problem!" Verme finally said.
Charlotte gave her a look.
"Mommy I may be adopted, but you really should know more about me!"
"Well I do, honey I do!"
In that moment, a tiny ant man approached them. It happened to be Frank FrankFooter the ant.
"Foolish girls, is the party here?" asked Frank, obviously being mean.
"Franky! My ant man! Where the hell are my visitors?!?" Verme replied.
"Theyre coming! And DONT call me Franky!!!" Screamed Frank.
Frank whistled.

Out of nowhere, came an Ugly Chihuahua and Cat leading a pack of endless people. The two animals appeared to go by the names of Ren and Stimpy. They had been familair with everyone in HollyWood, nevermind Sky City. Verme was
very happy that everybody had arrived.
"Alright lets get our fucking uglyass groove ON!" she swore, sounding half-retarded. Ren had admired Verme's sense of enthusiasm.
"Right she is, lets get this parteh started!!!" Ren screamed, sounding retarded
as well. As everyone ran like maniacs into the house, poor Ren was squished
under the feet of the many people.

Night was quickly falling.
Verme's house was the loudest in the whole neighborhood, making people go insane. Not to mention the people in her house were already insane themselves.
That night was a gay, happy time. For people had been swinging from light fixures, shouting out the window and finally, they were drinking eggnog on top of her very roof. Verme wasn't enjoying her party very much.
As mentioned before, she hadn't recieved any gifts from her neighbors.
Lady Lara was the only person who was considerate enough to give Verme a gift.
Feeling like the only person to give Verme a gift, Lara felt foolish, but she tried not to let it show. Lara felt awkward.
"Here's your gift...." Lara said as her voice trailed off.
Verme took the gift, not noticing Lara's regrets.
That was when Verme scared Lara by suddenly screaming at the whole crowd.
"WHAT THE FUCK does a grown ass girl need to get attention in here?!?!?!?!"
She roared, her voice ehcoing throughout the room.
Silence emerged for 3 seconds, even the music stopped.
A sponge by the name of Spongebob Squarepants shyly raised his hand.
"Err...I got you a present...." he said, nervously raising a peanut bag in his other hand. Verme gave him a witch look.
"THATS NOT GOOD ENOUGH YOU GAY ASS!" Verme replied.


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PostSubject: Re: Sky City, My Story!   Sun Mar 09, 2008 8:14 pm

Hehe, Verme is awesome! XD
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PostSubject: Yeppers!   Sun Mar 09, 2008 11:13 pm

Yes, Verme is very cool! Even CornyMan agrees!
Ok so here goes the rest of the chapter:
As silence returned, Lara noticed this and She decided to break the silence.
"VERME your drunk again, stop!" she cried out.
"Let go of me!" Verme snapped.
She broke from Lara's grasp, and turned to walk away. As Verme grumbled to herself, she glanced at the people's happy faces.
"This is some dumb crap" Verme told herself.
Suddenly, she appeared to have stepped on something. A sharp cry of pain rang throughout the room. Verme looked down in surprise, and realized that she had just stepped on Frank the ant.
"Y-you fool, you incompetent fool, Im only an ant, you f-fool!" Frank stammered.
"Oh no! Im Sorry! Frankie!" Verme cried. Frank didn't like being called Frankie.
"Don't call me Frankie!" he screamed indignantly. Verme was shocked by how upset Frank was.
"Next time youll be careful where your going, you drugged bear BITCH!" Verme did not like his negative comment. Verme had then peeled Frank off her foot and carelessly tossed him across the room. He hit the wall. And fell to the floor. Suddenly, everyone's attention turned to the door, where Trixie was loudly entering with her two friends. As they threw things across the room, carelessy, Trixie noticed Frank the ant, while KS and Tanny noticed the hot Vending mahine and computer. Trixie knelt down next to Frank. "What happened?" she asked, concerned.
"Th-that B-birthday f-fool just flinged me acros the room, help me, Im severly hurt!" Cried Frank.

Trixie gently picked Frank up and wrapped him in a bandage. She placed him next to the punch bowl.
"Better?" she asked.
"Yeah, thanks, FOOL!" Frank replied being mean.
Trixie stood there.
"Ok, forget you." Trixie finally decided to say.
Trixie sighed and walked over to her friends. As she walked her way, she notied that Tanny was breakdancing idiotically and KS was making YouTube poops.
Trixie steamed.
"You Idiots!" She bellowed.
Trixie walked up to 13 year old Fennec Fox KS, making the YouTube poops on Verme's computer.
She had immediatley unplugged the computer from the outlet.
"What are you doing?!" KS screamed.
"That YouTube poop was gonna be the best thing EVER!"
"I dont care, you, my friend are an idiot, and that is all that matters to ME! OK?!?" Trixie said to KS, pulling her closely to her face.
"I'm no idiot!" KS yelled.
Trixie stood there. She rolled her eyes and walked away from Ks.
She made her way to Tanny, who was breakdancing around crazily like a worm/chicken/monkey. Big Mistake. At that moment Tanny had accidentally kicked the cup of fruit punch that Trixie was holding, and it spilled onto Trixie's shirt.
Trixie gasped in amazement.
Everybody stared.
"Run, NOW!" Trixie demanded.
"Righty-O!" Tanny said, running off.
That was when something happened.
"Everyone! Listen up!" A voice shouted.
Everyone turned and looked at Ella, Flippy's cousin.
She was a thirteen-year-old warrior bear who had just walked into the party.
"Everyone in the neighborhood is complaining about the noise you're making! We all want you to go home for the night."
Nobody liked what they heard.
"What If we dont feel like it?"
Verme questioned.
"I have a suggestion" Lara called out. Everyone turned to look at her.
"Why dont we take the party to the hotel down 2 blocks?" Lara then suggested.
Everyone had agreed.
In just a few moments, everybody went crazy in joy and was soon out the door.
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PostSubject: Again! Again!   Mon Mar 10, 2008 1:20 am

Ten minutes have passed. The neighborhood was now left in peace.
Except for the poor people at The Hotel, Paradise Hilton. These people would have to suffer the consequences of Verme and her neighbors Invading the hotel.
As the hotel manager Mr. Hasencakca talked to his beloved daughter Perida, the unruly guests had arrived, abruptivley.
"And just what do you think you are doing here?" Mr. Hasencakca questioned.
"We...came...to chill." Trixie replied, glasses on her face.
Gem, the Jewin Pokepuff approached from behind Trixie.
"Yeah what she said!" Gem cried out. Trixie screamed.
"Dont..sneak...up...on...me..AGAIN!" Trixie snapped at Gem.
Mr. Hasencakca simply exchanged unsure glances with Perida, both not sure
with what was going on.
"Listen Byotches, either you let us stay or u suffer!!" Ella cried out.
Mr. Hasencakca approved.
"Ok have it your way!"
Everybody then cheered and went their way.
Pretty Soon everybody was dancing with the song, "One More Time" a song by the band Daft Punk.
As the music blared through the speakers, something didn't seem right. Everbody felt as if they were being watched. As Trixie talked to Ella about how her shirt was drenched with fruit punch, the door swung open. Everybody stopped their partying. In the doorway stood the infamous Pokemon nazis, the Pazis.

Ok! Now its Chaper 2!!!!


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PostSubject: Re: Sky City, My Story!   Sat Mar 15, 2008 10:52 am

I like your story, but if you don't mind I have some advice, You should try to use more metaphors because they always make writing more interesting. Also, maybe try looking up different words in a thesaurus or something.
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PostSubject: Reply   Sat Mar 15, 2008 12:01 pm

Thanks for the critism. I havent been reading enough literature examples to really have good vocab. Ill look in the thesaurus. And your right i need to use more metaphors Im just lazy sometimes when it comes to writing.
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PostSubject: Re: Sky City, My Story!   Sat Mar 15, 2008 9:35 pm

Chapter 2

The hotel by now was dead silent.
The Pazis stood at the door.
Everybody's heart dropped.
"STOP PARTYING!"
The head Pazi said.
Nobody replied.
They stared hard an long at the Pazis.
"No Partying Okay?!? you better Obey!" The head Pazi yelled.
The people kept on staring.
It seemed as if the people stared right through the Pazis.
The head Pazi broke out maniacally.
"STOP YOUR DAMN STARING AND GO HOME!"
The Pazi shot from a gun throught the wall.
Everybody screamed.
"Help us! How are we gonna survive?"
"Lord! Help!!!"
"Oh my god, Pazis of the world!!"
Anymonous voices continued to go throughout the room.
People suddenly began to run in circles screaming,
Knocking each other over.
A few people got shot by the dreaded Pazis.
What a bloody mess.
Lara Trixie Ella looked frantically throughout the room, wondering
where to go. KS screamed, for she had a plan to jump out the window
to save herself.
" I SEE A TRUCK COMING WE CAN JUMP OUT TO SAVE OURSELVES! KS yelled to everybody.
Then everything had stopped.
Trixie bitch slapped KS.
"This is no time to be thinking about trucks!" Trixie said angrily.
As Frank passed by them he had screamed, "You fools! Run for your life! You fools!"

and.........uh, total writers block. T.T
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PostSubject: Sky city   Sun Mar 16, 2008 12:14 am

I could help you with your story again if you want me to.
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PostSubject: Re: Sky City, My Story!   Wed Mar 26, 2008 2:04 pm

who is this supposed to be? i can help you too, if thats okay.
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PostSubject: Re: Sky City, My Story!   Wed Mar 26, 2008 2:08 pm

No no thats okay. I got it, lately people on DeviantArt have been helping meh. Very Happy so anyways, here goes: The enter bar isnt working correctly, and so ill have to edit this when I get home. T.T So here goes.
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PostSubject: Re: Sky City, My Story!   Wed Mar 26, 2008 6:29 pm

Ella had a plan, a crazy one.
"I hope this works" she said, she carefully stood up.
Ella climbed to the balcony, attemping to grab the Pazi's attention.
"You GENETIC MUTATIONS AND POOR EXUSE FOR POKEMON, you wanna shoot me? Im right here!"
The Pazis turned. Seeing her, they aimed thier weapons and fired.
Ella quickly dodged the bullets, as they smacked glass plates, shattering them completeley.
Ella ran fast. Very fast, until she bumped right into Trixie.
"Trixie!" Ella exclaimed, shaking her.
"I need your help in evacuating the people out of the building, right away!"
Trixie looked at the Pazis.
"How in the hell are we gonna get through THOSE guys??"
Ella looked as well.
"Nice question, very smart,....how about you get KS to stab them in the head?"
Trixie looked at Ella.
"And that is a WEIRD idea, I cant even find her." Trixie replied.
At that moment, KS ran, dodging the bullets that the Pazis had shot, she had eventually found her way to the table where Ella and Trixie were hiding under.
"Dang these guys" KS told herself.
"They sure do ruin everything, Kathy, them damn bastards."
KS gave Trixie a look.
Trixie ignored.
"Heres a challenge for you,I DARE you to stab the leader of that patrol in the face."
KS had a look of shock.
"HOW?!? WE ARE BEING SHOT AT!" She yelled.
The Pazis had run out of bullets.
"Oh quick, Kathy! They are reloading! QUICK! NOWS YOUR CHANCE!"
Trixie yelled, shoving KS out of the way.
KS muttered all of the swears that came to her mind.
She ran from under the table.
Unsheathing her knife, she made her way to the leader.
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PostSubject: Re: Sky City, My Story!   Thu Mar 27, 2008 9:09 am

whoa, this is geting good, go KS!
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PostSubject: Re: Sky City, My Story!   Thu Mar 27, 2008 10:41 am

But wait! Theres more!

The Pazi leader noticed KS.
"HUH?!?" He exclaimed.
Before he could react, KS had quickly stabbed him in the face by then.
The leader screamed, clutching his face.
The Pazis opened fire, They shot at KS.
"I swear i'll never touch another Pazi for as long as I live" KS told herself, bullets being shot at her, ringing throughout the room.
KS saw the table with Trixie and Ella in it.
She successfully managed to get under the table, a bullet barely missing her leg.
She panted with exhaust, and gave a glare to Trixie.
"Trixie, esta muy loca!" KS yelled, using her best Spanish accent.
"Dont use that Spanish SHIT on me!" Trixie snapped.
"Sorry I got caught up in the moment." KS concluded.
Ella thought quickly to solve the situation.
Using her thinking, she quickly dialed the phone number of Flippy, her cousin and dear Happy Tree Friend.
KS and Trixie still managed to argue.
"Shut up, you two, im trying to call Flippy on the phone!"
Ella said, Frustrated.

On the other side of town, Flippy stood in bed, watching the Lights of cars from the streets reflect against the walls of his room.
The phone rang.
"Who can that be??" Flippy yawned, stretching.
He wondered who could ave been calling him at this hour as he got up to answer the phone. He picked it up, reluctantly.
Ellas voice screamed fro the other line.
"Flippymy cousin, the Pazis have invaded Paradise Hilton hotel! We need your help in killing them, NOW!"
A shoe barely missed Ella's head.
Trixie sudenly grabbed the phone.
"Get your ass over here, GREEN BEAR!" Trixie screamed rudely over the phone to Flippy. Ella wrestled the phone from Trixie.
"Think you can help us out?" Ella said, a worried voice filling her throat.
"It would be a pleasure to" Flippy said, looking at a pair of grenades in his hand.

Trixie still had urges to grab the phone, Ella fought, trying to keep her back.
Without warning, a bullet from a the gun of a Pazi flew and immediatley destroyed the phone.

Mr. Hasencaka stood in his room, hearing the rumbling from outside. He tried to ignore it. But then there was shaking.
"Perida!" Callled mr. Hasencaka
In about 3 seconds later, his daughter, Perida entered his room.
"What is it, daddy?" Perida asked her annoyed father.
"Go tell those annoying guests to TURN IT DOWN!" Mr. HasenCaka ordered.
"Right away, daddy." Perida said, being ever so obidiant.

Verme screamed, running to the bathroom, the Pazis soon following.
Verme sat on the toilet, shaking.
"Sure hope they don't find me here, drinking Heineken."
She took a shot of beer.
"Thats the good stuff......" Verme said, nearly hiccuping, she could feel the blood rush to her head.
Perida tip toed to the room.
"What is going....?"
A bullet nearly missed Perida's head.
"EEK!" She squealed.
The Pazis banged on the bathroom door with thier Mighty Electrical ram.
Verme was still inside, whimpering.
"Oh no!! What can I dooo??!"
She took a quick swig of more Heneken out of her nervousness.
Outside, Pazus were planning on the rape of Perida.
"Hey babe looking good,..." Joe Pazi said, eyebrowing Perida
"Get away!" Perida shrieked, smaking Joe in the head with a bronze statue, knocking him out. The Pazis took one last violent smash to the bathroom door, officially breaking it open. The impact from this blast had shook a chandeliar. Soon it dropped, right on Perida, killing her instantly.

"Dang! How in the hell did that happen?" Mike Pazi said, scratching his head.
Mr. Hasencaka could not take the noise anymore.
He got up from his bead, stomping, he made his way down the stairs.
As he entered the room, he saw the Pazis doing gret damage to his hotel.
But more importantl, he saw his dead daughter.
"PERIDA! NOT YOU!" Mr. Hasencaka shouted out, the Pazis noticing him.
The Pazis aimed their weapons at Mr. Hasencaka. They fired.
Blood poured out of every spot that every bullet struck in his body.
Soon enough, Mr. Hasencaka finally died from one last blow from a gun. It went to his brain.

Flippy arrived at the hotel.
He was exposed to the dead corspes and shooting of the Pazis. Not good.
Flippy suddenly could feel the war of Vietnam 3 rushing through his mind again.
He tried to resist the urge to relive that war again, but the resistnce was failing.
Flippy was officially Flipping out.
He grabbed his knife and charged at one of the Pazi soldiers.
Without hesitation, Flippy mercisslessly tore out his very eye and YANKED out his brain.
Flippy didnt realize what he just done.

The Pazis succesfully forced Verme out of the bathroom.
"We have your son" The leader said, a devilsh grin on his face.
"C-Cubby??" Verme choked out.
ThePazi leader grabbed Verme by the neck and raised her to to him.
"Tell us where your weapons are or he DIES!"
Instanty, there was a tomato flung at the Pazi leader's head.
He turned around to see who it was.
It was Vermes husband, finally taking an effort to protect his wife, being that he was usually a wimp.
The Pazis dropped Verme and quickly closed in on him.
"Your Wife and Son will DIE, mister!" Sally pazi yelled, rasing Cubby in her hand, whom was struggling to get out of her grasp, being unsuccessfull.
Time was quickly ticking by.
"Where is the exit? WHERE IS THE EXIT?!?!" Trixie screamed, pulling nervously on her hair. she saw no exit.
Trixie groaned.
Vermes husband was in for it now.
Wiping the tomato of his head, the leader took out his pocket knife.
Verme ran to her husband. They squeezed each other.
"Time to say Nighty Night!" The leader said, stroking his knife, a sick twisted look on his face. Verme whimpered, her husband squeezed her tightly.
In a second the Pazis' head was blown off COMPLETELY.
Verme and her Husband opened thier eyes.
For Flippy had killed the Pazis with his bare hands. He had rescued Cubby as well.

Trixie shook Ella violently.
"Ella, I dont wanna die! I dont!" Trixie exclaimed.
Ella looked around to see all the dead corspes and blood.
"Its like the Pazi war 1 starting all over again...."
"Ella, if your done talking to yourself there, WE HAVE A SITUATION!"
Trixie could easily see that Ella was dazing out, and now wasnt the time to do that.

Verme and her Husband held Cubby tightly.
Flippy, seeing this family moment, soon had turned back to normal.
He left them there, safe and sound.
Ella ran to Flippy.
"Flippy, your here! and you are covered in blood, what in the hell happened?!?"
"I....dont know....I remembered Vietnam war.....and Im here all of the sudden...."
Ella looked at him.
"You Flipped out didnt you?" Ella was no dummy.
Flippy looked at her, wideyed.
"What gives you that idea?" he asked fearful that it would happen again.
"Nevermind just close your eyes!" Ella said, knowing that she had better self control than him when it came to war.

The fridge was almost empty.
Mike Pazi saw it, his mouth watering.
"Jeez, Im hungry."
He saw an egg. An egg which he didnt know had a GRINADE in it.
For this was Ella's sick pracical joke on the Hotel Manager, Mr. Hasencaka.
She had wanted to blow him up, showing the hotel that they didnt need him.
The Pazi bite into the egg, not knowing he had removed the tab from the grinade.
He then noticed a note on the plate.
"Reserved for Mr. Hasencaka" It read.
"HA! FUCK MR. HASENCAKA, THIS EGG IS RESERVED FOR MEEEE!"

Verme, her husband, Cubby and many of the survivors had approached Trixie Ella and Flippy. Everyone didnt know how lucky they weere to see each other alive.
"This place is going to blow up!" Ella announced
"BLOW UP!!" Flippy yelled, his eyes in a blindfold.

Mike Pazi started to have rumbling going throughout his body.
"Hmm?!? Whats this?" he asked curious.
Ella saw his action.
"It was nice knowing you, shit face." Ella said, her voice being deeper than usual.
"Shit." Mike Pazi realized.

The roof was smashed in, there was no escape.
"Any ideas? ANYBODY?" Trixie said, thrashing her arms around, knowing that everybody would be dead in a matter of seconds.
Flippy had a cannon.
"MOVE" he ordered.
In moments, the wall had been blown a hole in it by Flippy, making the snow mist of the outside Winter come in through the hotel.
A truck stood outside. Flippy's truck.
"ASTALAVISTA, BABY!" Ella yelled, giving the peace sign through her hands.
"HUH?!?!" Mike Pazi questioned, about to blow up.
Flippy started the truck.
They all dorve away as the hotel exploded.
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PostSubject: Re: Sky City, My Story!   Fri Mar 28, 2008 10:20 am

this story is.......confusing me......XD
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PostSubject: Re: Sky City, My Story!   Sat Mar 29, 2008 9:36 am

Still More!

Chapter 3

The next morning arrived.
It was 29 degrees farenhiet, freezing.
Snow hit the ground hard.
Trixie Ella and Lara walked throught that very blizzard, planning to go to Trinity's new year party.
"Its freezing out here, man I sure wish I brought a jacket." Trixie told herself.
Ella and Lara looked at her then chuckled.
"What?!" Trixie asked, confused.
"I dont wear coats in the winter, I have warm heating powers!" Lara said, proud of herself.
"I am a bear, my coat is natural!"
Trixie gave Ella a mean look
"Hmmph, Bears" Trixie muttered.
"Whats wrong with being a bear??" Ella gasped.
"All that Fur...." Trixie simply said.
As they walked down the block they noticed two people in the distance.

hold on, writers block T.T


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PostSubject: Re: Sky City, My Story!   Sat Mar 29, 2008 4:16 pm

No offense but it doesn't really make sense. where did you get warm heating powers from? Very Happy
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PostSubject: Re: Sky City, My Story!   Sat Mar 29, 2008 5:01 pm

Its explained inthe previous version which I havent written yet...
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PostSubject: Re: Sky City, My Story!   Sat Mar 29, 2008 5:51 pm

why dont you write them in order so they make sense?
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PostSubject: Re: Sky City, My Story!   Sat Mar 29, 2008 7:12 pm

Well since Sky City 3 is the most important of the 8 series, I have to write it first so I dont forget all of the eventss.
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PostSubject: Re: Sky City, My Story!   Tue Apr 01, 2008 2:22 am

I have a novel I've been working on since I was an embryo. Well, not literally. But I made up the characters when I was a kid. They ended up changing a lot, and I never wrote much of the storyline down, but I still remember it after all these years.
And we're talking about someone who sometimes can't remember her name here. XD

But I don't like starting stories from the beginning from some reason. Did you write the first two books in short story form or something? I usually do that.
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PostSubject: Re: Sky City, My Story!   Tue Apr 01, 2008 9:54 am

Sky City started out at random with ideas that were all over the place so i had to stitch them together.
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PostSubject: Re: Sky City, My Story!   Tue Apr 01, 2008 9:55 am

That is how most good stories are born, yes. Very Happy
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PostSubject: Re: Sky City, My Story!   Wed Apr 02, 2008 1:15 pm

Yupperz! lol! lol! lol! lol!
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PostSubject: Re: Sky City, My Story!   Wed Apr 02, 2008 6:58 pm

but i dont get why you randomly chose sky city 3 to be the most important?
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PostSubject: Re: Sky City, My Story!   Thu Apr 03, 2008 1:07 am

For the same reason XP Jay chose episode 23 to be the most important episode...
No one knows. XD
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